从这两篇作文来看高中英语教师评课B4U2，你的词汇量及句法的运用是不错的。
先说第一篇，提示的信息都已经包括在内了，但是我觉得句子用得有点生硬。给出的信息只是起到提示的作用，不一定要逐字逐句的翻译。比如文中提到“学生的反应：喜欢该课外活动，能放松心情、校园生活更丰富充实”，而且你是以第一人称写的，所以你就是以该校学生的身份在写。The responses of the students indicate that they like these after-class activities for the reason that they can not only relax and refresh their minds but also make their school life more wonderful.就可以改成we enjoy these after-class activities because they can not only relax and refresh our minds but also make our school life more wonderful.就行了啊,注意文章的人称要保持一致。
Physical exercise\reading\singing\musical instrument playing and English games are included.这句话也可以改改，就直接用there are physical exercise.....就可以了，简单，明了。
另外，注意句子与句子直接的连接，可以适当运用一些关联词。
第二篇文章写得不错，文章结构、层次都很好，有一小点错误，instead of后要加V-ing